commentary#1 on Erik Arndt

  I really like the topic of addiction towards the internet, especially social media sites such as facebook. I also noticed that you backed up some facts using some sources, that made your essay more reliable in a sense to your arguments. I also like how you made the topic to your essay aimed towards people at a personal level, since you stated with facts that almost 50% of internet users use facebook. Due to those facts, i believe that your argument as I've said before, will interest the reader at a more personal level. Your essay is also at most arguable, since many people do not behave in the way that you have described them to be through your statistics and points, but nonetheless, is acceptable from your research. One of the things that i have noticed on your essay is that you could back some of your paragraphs up with more facts or related things to the topics that are being brought to attention. overall, your essay was an enjoyable read, and it does affect the reader at a more personal level frrom your facts.